• Jan. 19, 2008
Writing Workshop Lesson 5
Character:Starla Emotion: Cold
Starla hugged herself at she Shuffled through the Wet Snow. Her Cloudy Breath Shone in the Twilight. She Blew on her Hands but that did not help. If only her Friends were there!
Character: Hannah Emotion: Angry
Hannah Scowled at Starla as she places her hands on her hips. "I Know you have my Earrings Starla!" Said Hannah as she Fixed her Eyes on Starla. "I Do Not Have Them!" Starla Shouted Back. All Hannah Knows is That week is going to be a LONG one.
Hope you like it!
Comments
• Jan. 21, 2008
Lesson 5
Posted by skmarlow
Showing characters' feelings is fun, isn't it? You have good understanding of how to SHOW me Starla is cold (I shivered as I read. Nice!). Isn't this lots better than just saying, "Starla was very cold as she walked through the snow."
Hannah's anger was easy to see through your dialogue (conversation).
My hope is that you take these little exercises and remember them when you are writing the real story. I've found that many students do well on the lessons, but then they slip back into the old "telling" mode when they write the story. Don't do that! Keep working hard to show not tell.
